"What luck to find this lush environment so close to the desert!" says Bob, kicking stones in the lake. "Pity i cant build boats, there must be plenty of fish here!
Stop chasing the rabbits!"
And so the chase begins, through the bushes, up and over the rocks, across the river, though good 'ol Bob feels a disturbance... in the force.
Bob just manages to catch his DOG in time to see the rabbits head just... falling off.
.... their puzzles looks were still on their face as their heads rolled down the river.
Fred feels his line pull. He reels his line in quickly, thinking to himself "finnaly, im gunna catch my first fish in this lake! Wait till Bob see this big 'ol..."
Fred stares into Bob's eyes, which are in his head, which is on Fred's line.
With incredible speed for a 60 year old, Fred rushes home. His wife looks at him. "Whats wrong platypus?"
"Hunny, we're having stew tonight!"
Since this is my first map, it would be nice to have some feedback so i can improve. thanks ^^
EDIT: Updated the map, has been tested. Enjoy.
[Edited on 01/24/08 @ 10:53 PM]
Posted on 01/24/08 @ 08:01 AM
In order to try and educate newer members, can I please direct you to the Review Guidelines which clearly state that requests for reviews should not be made by the designer in the comments thread to your map? Use the forums - there is a specific thread for you to request a review if you feel the need.
Posted on 01/24/08 @ 01:46 PM
I hope you have playtested it, if not - do playtest your maps furthermore (do the CPU lords build their castles on it) due to the play ABILITY... Good idea is to write if they build their castles in the map page, so we won't play several minutes with lords, till we notice that they do nothing... Just an advice. We know this can be played like a multiplayer map, but it's hard to review multiplayer map, unless you have friends to play with or maybe it will be not honest, personally in multiplayer I'm focused on the gameplay and my road to victory and don't pay much attention to the map... I think your map is great for a first try, I see a bunch of creativity in your first map... A good way to improve yourself in mapmaking is to see the other's guys skirmishes... For example the surajsubba's skirmishes helped me a lot and I made an excellent step forward... Just download some professionl's map and look how has he made the things in it via the map editor... Good point for increasing the review's score is to add an average or longer story with interesting sujet :) Oh, and "assasin" is with double "s" - assassin :D Thanks for sharing and keep designing!
WingSephiroth File Author
Posted on 01/24/08 @ 07:17 PM
ooo ok thanks for advice. i will look at forums.
Posted on 01/26/08 @ 11:07 PM
i have to say this is on par with some of Surasjubbas' work. not to all the detail but it's on it's way.